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<p>Ice that books say shouldn&rsquo;t be<br />&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; in the fridge at all<br />curiously takes to itself properties<br />&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; of food around about.<br /><br />I&rsquo;d swear the last piece I fished out<br />was a sliver of salmon<br />&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; glamorous, sparkling<br />in its last moments<br />till it returned to the water<br />&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; that flourished it.<br /><br />Is that how it was for you<br />&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; in those final moments;<br />Breath, or something shaped<br />&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; like breath,<br />drawn out, drawn back<br />&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; to Aonach Mor?<br /><br /><br /></p>
<p>kj26sept10﻿</p>]]></description><wfw:commentRss>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/rss-comments-entry-9506595.xml</wfw:commentRss></item><item><title>City composition by kevin jackson</title><dc:creator>Kevin Jackson</dc:creator><pubDate>Wed, 13 Oct 2010 19:39:43 +0000</pubDate><link>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/2010/10/13/city-composition-by-kevin-jackson.html</link><guid isPermaLink="false">337316:3788390:9178304</guid><description><![CDATA[<p>&nbsp;</p>
<p><br />1<br /><em>She wants a bay&rsquo;bee</em><br />He wasn&rsquo;t much more<br />Tomato face<br />still squidgy<br />in places<br />If I dared touch<br /><br /><em>She says I gotta get her <br />a ticket</em><br /><br />2<br />A woman with supersize <br />buggy<br />Two hoodies<br />slouch towards<br />One eyes its weight<br />the two kids<br />leg-locked<br />Feels where a scout badge was<br />Wants to help<br /><br />Doesn&rsquo;t know how to<br />And his mate<br />is already up<br />spitting grins<br /><br />3<br />Barely sat<br />and shes troffing<br />through<br />a bag layered<br />with books and cakes<br />A monster bakewell tart<br />meets its mincer<br /><br />I wonder if the books <br />go the same way<br /><br />Were train tables<br />see through<br />her legs would be<br />whorled round each other<br />her left<br />foot flopped on her<br />half-off shoe<br /><br />4<br />Then she looks up<br />Looks direct at<br />my hungry pen<br />Part-mended sadness<br />reproach maybe<br />girdles a loose face<br />Hair that hasn&rsquo;t felt<br />fingers open its<br />lustre in a long while<br /><br />5<br />All eyes are a species<br />of interference<br /><br /><em>Bear down<br />Bear down, bear down<br />Breathe</em><br /><br />Like those on these two planes<br />death dealers<br />once<br />Here<br />laid in rooms<br />loftier than houses<br />Bounded by<br />eyes<br /><br />Craving darkness?<br /><br /><em>Bear down<br />Bear down, bear down<br />Bear down<br />Breathe</em></p>
<p>6<br />I quietly pull <br />the thorn out<br />again <br />The lion<br />pads away<br /><br /><br />kj13oct10<br /><br /><br />﻿</p>]]></description><wfw:commentRss>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/rss-comments-entry-9178304.xml</wfw:commentRss></item><item><title>The Brothers Sueno by Kevin Jackson</title><dc:creator>Kevin Jackson</dc:creator><pubDate>Wed, 29 Sep 2010 21:07:43 +0000</pubDate><link>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/2010/9/29/the-brothers-sueno-by-kevin-jackson.html</link><guid isPermaLink="false">337316:3788390:9047318</guid><description><![CDATA[<p>&nbsp;</p>
<p>6.7&rdquo; tall<br /><br />Did I dream it?<br />Union by 1 per cent<br />Disagree to disagree<br /><br />It could have been a nightmare<br />Uncommonly speaking<br /><br />Like an inheritance<br />One life only<br /><br />Four-square behind him<br />All corners dissolved<br />Like tablets<br /><br />Or blame.<br />Rude birds flap<br />Silently into view<br /><br />What if they are ravens?<br />They must be hallucinations.<br />How many hallucinations<br />can one bowl hold?<br /><br />All HTML will be escaped</p>
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<p>kj26sept</p>]]></description><wfw:commentRss>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/rss-comments-entry-9047318.xml</wfw:commentRss></item><item><title>The Shrine by Brian Edwards</title><dc:creator>Brian Edwards</dc:creator><pubDate>Sun, 04 Jul 2010 01:13:17 +0000</pubDate><link>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/2010/7/3/the-shrine-by-brian-edwards.html</link><guid isPermaLink="false">337316:3788390:8170928</guid><description><![CDATA[<p><span style="font-size: 140%;"><br />The&nbsp;</span><span style="font-size: 140%;">Shrine</span><span style="font-size: 140%;"><br /></span><br />Rising before dawn, she slides into suede slippers,<br />plucks wing-tip glasses from the unlit nightstand,<br />this ritual now as mechanical as the scratches<br />she makes on lottery tickets twice a week&mdash;<br />4 digits from her son&rsquo;s dog-tags, and the calendar<br />date, circled in red, the day he returns from Iraq.<br /><br />Cold breath leads her downstairs where Iraq<br />waits on television. Bare hands on cold walls, she slips<br />into the tunnel of day. The draft disturbs the calendar<br />as she coerces door from jamb: she never could stand<br />to set it right, he'd spent so long hanging it, the week<br />before he left for combat. Usually quick to scratch<br /><br />an itch, but war casts light as well as dark and a scratch<br />serves only to kill a feeling. She switches on Iraq,<br />pokes on the kitchen light, lights up a pot of weak<br />tea, saving the bag in a chipped egg cup. Outside, cowslips<br />dance in wait of spring and birch withstands<br />another March. Nature has no regard for calendar<br /><br />months, she thinks, as she shuffles to the calendar<br />armed with sharpened pencil, ready to scratch<br />off another day. Framed by photographs, she stands<br />and waits for the first wedge of sun to light the dust. Iraq<br />burns under the same star. Do Iraqi mothers wear slippers<br />at dawn, waiting for news of the dead, a week-<br /><br />long skirmish lingering longer than the taste of weak<br />tea? Pencil between teeth, she flips the calendar<br />and conducts her daily count, a habit she slipped<br />into as easily as comfy slippers. Pencil scratches<br />on a calendar and photos on a wall now define her: Iraq&mdash;<br />her son in uniform pointing a rifle, standing<br /><br />atop a tank, no longer the 3-year-old fireman stood<br />on tiptoes, chest out. On tiptoes she sees a week's<br />worth of dust on every frame. Is it sand in Iraq<br />that collects on photo frames? Are calendars<br />with circled dates, stirred by desert storms, scratched<br />with pencils by mothers on tiptoes in slippers?<br /><br />She drains the weak tea from her mug, stands<br />tall in slippered feet and scratches<br />another day of Iraq from her calendar.<br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br />~</p>]]></description><wfw:commentRss>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/rss-comments-entry-8170928.xml</wfw:commentRss></item><item><title>Atlas - by larry jordan</title><dc:creator>larry jordan</dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 10 May 2010 17:55:03 +0000</pubDate><link>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/2010/5/10/atlas-by-larry-jordan.html</link><guid isPermaLink="false">337316:3788390:7630357</guid><description><![CDATA[<h1>&nbsp;</h1>
<p>Using a lens flattened by his heel,<br />Mercator imagined the world<br />after Giotto&rsquo;s eye-trick for round and deep,<br />back to front. Grolier, Hammond and Oxford<br />drew, by extending his lines, their guess at Troy,<br />their tabulations of tea, rubies and gin.<br />I pass my hand over sketchy borders,<br />treaties and pacts, incursions of painted faces.<br />&nbsp;<br />A red line hashed by blue dotted labels,<br />crosses over pools of ink to the rims of country,<br />domain, even realms under reign, highlighting tallies<br />of skeletons with arrows of GDP.<br />I&rsquo;m getting crumbs in the margin. That&rsquo;s a 2<br />in millions of Vietnamese who died<br />from the convolutions of rescue.<br />&nbsp;<br />Underlined dollars graph their score since 1946,<br />a carousel of color spinning off the title page.<br />Little notes of previous wars conspire<br />for jurisdiction, wag little truces, splay<br />bright arrows of gold, tin, B52s.<br />Little parachutes sewn into sails<br />luff from the masts of liberated isles.<br />&nbsp;<br />Such art, such flamboyance, He is giddy<br />over a wedge lifted notably, an appropriate<br />slice, larger than others,<br />balanced, pertly, on his shoulder.&nbsp;</p>]]></description><wfw:commentRss>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/rss-comments-entry-7630357.xml</wfw:commentRss></item><item><title>The Custodian by Joe Lofgren</title><dc:creator>Joe Lofgren</dc:creator><pubDate>Tue, 23 Feb 2010 19:02:02 +0000</pubDate><link>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/2010/2/23/the-custodian-by-joe-lofgren.html</link><guid isPermaLink="false">337316:3788390:6804274</guid><description><![CDATA[<p>&nbsp;</p>
<p>The custodian looks<br />as if he will fall dead tomorrow,<br />as his methamphetic body<br />pushes garbage<br />floor to floor.<br /><br />This is the frail heaving man<br />as he leans to the sideways stumble,<br />half aware gander<br />through the longest halls<br />of his life.<br />I wonder as he passes<br />those who gawk</p>
<p>misunderstood</p>
<p>if he doesn't wonder<br />about the mores of custodial arts,<br />like the fine dexterity<br />in waxing previously<br />puked on floors,<br />or the recognition&nbsp;<br />in something that<br />never gets dirty.</p>
<p>Does he clean&nbsp;<br />around thoughts of sole order<br />or is there some hidden, shrunken,&nbsp;<br />wrinkled reason,<br />for his peaceful radiance?</p>
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<p>A boy leapt for a ball.&nbsp; He</p>
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<p>read its satisfactions, the cheers</p>
<p>cupped, back slaps coalesce</p>
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<p>to some kind of truth.</p>
<p>He stiffens them to a board,</p>
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<p>a place to pin his butterfly schemes.</p>
<p>Girls tried and fell apart, work</p>
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<p>tried, like the smell</p>
<p>&nbsp;of city streets, &nbsp;his aunt</p>
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<p>feera&rsquo;s pine cones, fugitives</p>
<p>of another summer. &nbsp;&nbsp;No</p>
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<p>hesitation, he reached the ball,</p>
<p>curved a bomb. &nbsp;Lifted the sea</p>
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<p>clean from the land</p>
<p>to cloud in eyes spilling another funeral.</p>
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<p>Revision -</p>
<p>&nbsp;</p>
<p>A boy leapt for a ball.&nbsp; He</p>
<p>&nbsp;</p>
<p>read its satisfactions, the cheers</p>
<p>cupped, back slaps coalesce</p>
<p>&nbsp;</p>
<p>to some kind of truth.</p>
<p>He stiffens them to a board,</p>
<p>&nbsp;</p>
<p>a place to pin his butterfly schemes.</p>
<p>Girls, work, city, a fretwork of</p>
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<p>distances. &nbsp;&nbsp;No</p>
<p>&nbsp;</p>
<p>hesitation, he reached the ball,</p>
<p>curved a bomb. &nbsp;Lifted the sea</p>
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<p>clean from the land</p>
<p>to cloud in eyes spilling another funeral.&nbsp;</p>
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<p>This is the Collatz conjecture:<br />pick a number, one dear to you,<br />one you might allow to brew the coffee<br />in the morning. &nbsp;If this number is even&ndash;<br />smooth like a sprung dance floor, even as the lake<br />at twilight when the wind has died&ndash;<br />divide it by two.&nbsp; Nothing so straightforward<br />stays whole forever. &nbsp;If the number is odd &ndash;<br />like his brother, the one who winks<br />and runs his hand along your shoulder &ndash;<br />multiply it by three (though that&rsquo;s a party best avoided)<br />and add one, your sister-in-law perhaps,<br />with her raspberry-scented hair<br />and interesting eye shadow.&nbsp; Apply these rules<br />over and over.&nbsp; When you get to one, stop. <br />Theory says you will always be reduced to this,<br />the only number you can rely on.&nbsp;</p><p><br/><br/></p>]]></description><wfw:commentRss>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/rss-comments-entry-6608849.xml</wfw:commentRss></item><item><title>lets see what you say about this motherfuckerpoets (as if you didn't know this was by MATTHEW GERALD MOSEMAN)</title><dc:creator>Matt Moseman</dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 01 Feb 2010 09:03:33 +0000</pubDate><link>http://www.afterliterature.org/public-critique-archive/2010/2/1/lets-see-what-you-say-about-this-motherfuckerpoets-as-if-you.html</link><guid isPermaLink="false">337316:3788390:6515887</guid><description><![CDATA[<p>dude there's this bitch motherfucker<br />i'm gonna tell you this<br />you know<br />motherfucker<br />i'm from new york<br />but i'm livin in boston<br />but you know mother fucker theres this bitch here<br />theres this bitch in boston im gonna kill her ass<br />i feel like i'm gonna im gonna kill this bitch's ass<br />and not like i would actually do it<br />i mean i feel like i could<br />i feel like i would like to for the good for humanity<br />just because of the kind of leeches that these kinda bitches here are<br />i mean there's just a certain kind of bitch here I mean just one<br />her name<br />shall not be named<br />her name shall not be named<br />i'm not going to name her name I'm only going to say<br />that it would be a shame if she were allowed to become a fertile mother<br />to produce more of her spawn to suck the kinds of life from man<br />that he deserves and he demands<br />to be rendered to his altar<br />which is very humble indeed<br />his altar<br />which is withering, his altar which is dying his altar which is put on sitcoms<br />to be erected upon as a scratching post for cats and for Italian Matriarchs<br />and tyrants of every kind<br />what kind of plumber would you like to see<br />on the next gubernatorial ballot for senator<br />who fucking cares<br />it's really not important<br />i mean the whole american government is corrupt<br />i mean fuck that shit<br />i mean don't waste your time voting<br />you heard me say it<br />do not waste your time voting.﻿<input id="gwProxy" type="hidden" /><input id="jsProxy" onclick="jsCall();" type="hidden" /></p>
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