Meltdown by A.E. Plastic

Stub-weary of

those PowerPoint personalities,
the Beowulfs of the Netscape years

the martyrdom
of rough sex
in Marriot Executive suites

hobnobbing with
the pre-nuptial cuties
at the tennis club,
bared arms semaphoring
a life of décor and therapy

the gourded compassion
for the stately declension
of my options underwater

Comments

[John de Prey]

Yes, I lke that it reads like a list, or declesion, seen so clearly by the narrator "underwater" - implying somewhere else, moving slowly and deliberately, trying a grope a way forward (not drowned I think). I love your cutting descriptions of them, and the narrator's bitterness that those are the options. Be carefull of ending lines with "-ion"; it's been used too much in the kind of stuff that wins poetry slams, rap and other unpoetical actities.

John

[Mike Barrett]

i think the -ion endings work very well here - a great ending. the whole thing sorta melts off the tongue.